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Erie
Jul 21, 2009 11:06:35 GMT -5
Post by padamay on Jul 21, 2009 11:06:35 GMT -5
Name: Erie
Age: 16 moons
Gender: tom
Clan: Deadplains
Rank: warrior
Description: Erie is a cream colored tom with ginger paws. His eyes are sky blue. He has sharp claws and teeth. He is built like a Thunderclan warrior.
Personality: Erie has a sharp tongue. He is evil and only helps himself. He is selfish. He steals from the clans, like lives, kits, and prey. Deep inside him their is caring, loving, and it is never used in battle. He is strong willed and can keep things to himself and share only with the ones he loves. When he is broad he kills for fun. He does not know when to stop.
History: Erie was from Windclan. He crossed paths with good and evil. He grew up with no starclan or code to follow. He lost the will to love when his mother from Windclan died. He often would visit her when he was younger and she would listen to him and help. Twolegs took him in when prey was scarce. Blood took him in and now he fights in an ever lasting battle for the Deadplains.
Roleplay Sample: Have one
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Erie
Jul 21, 2009 11:14:38 GMT -5
Post by Fuzzybreath on Jul 21, 2009 11:14:38 GMT -5
You spelled tongue wrong.
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Erie
Jul 21, 2009 12:37:19 GMT -5
Post by Charbarboo on Jul 21, 2009 12:37:19 GMT -5
How did Erie bring life to the Dead Plains?
And can you please check over your grammar?
~Charbarboo
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Erie
Jul 21, 2009 13:27:11 GMT -5
Post by padamay on Jul 21, 2009 13:27:11 GMT -5
I fixed it. Tell me if any other thing is spelled wrong.
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Erie
Jul 22, 2009 0:49:15 GMT -5
Post by Alex the Steamed Rice Eater on Jul 22, 2009 0:49:15 GMT -5
Also, ever and lasting should be combined into one word, everlasting. But it's really not that big of a deal, so just remember that later on.
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Erie
Jul 22, 2009 0:49:31 GMT -5
Post by Alex the Steamed Rice Eater on Jul 22, 2009 0:49:31 GMT -5
(Accepted)
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