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Post by padamay on Jun 29, 2009 18:53:25 GMT -5
Name: Erie
Age: 19 moons
Gender: tom
Clan: Dead plains
Rank: deputy (How many are their?)
Description: Erie is a silky black tom with a dark flame and yellow stripe on both shoulders. He has dark navy blue eyes, His claws and teeth are very sharp. He is muscular.
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Personality: Erie has a sharp tong and has fighting moves as a good has a Dead plain warrior. He is kind hearted, thow at times he will fight to the death over herbs that he can silage in the waste land. He believes in Starclan and often meets with the Medicine cats at half moon. (NO one can find out about it.)
History: Erie was a clan cat and was brought to the Dead Plains by a loner. He lives by the ways of Dead plains, but believes in Starclan from a dream he had. He is not the healer, but travels every half moon to the moonstone.
Roleplay Sample: Erie walked out of his camp and headed for the Moonstone, he had left moments ago and was running late. He spade away up the hill and into Windclan Territory.
As he started to run, he jumped over a bush to find himself face to face with a Medicine cat "Wish to go to the Moonstone with you, I believe in Starclan and have had a dream." he coughed out from running.
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Post by Fuzzybreath on Jun 29, 2009 19:33:26 GMT -5
The Dead Plains don't have Medicine cats. And Creamtail is a real cat of a different person, she can't be in his dream unless Roseheart says OK. And the Dead Plains don't like the Moonstone, they don't even have StarClan.
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Post by padamay on Jun 29, 2009 19:36:49 GMT -5
He is not dreaming, and I'll fit it.
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Post by Falconheart on Jun 30, 2009 13:25:14 GMT -5
look, this just isn't realistic. You should find a CAT with those sort of markings, not a bird.
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Post by Crowy on Jun 30, 2009 13:33:10 GMT -5
Plus YOU already HAVE a high position, therefore you should not be allowed another.
seeing as you had a go at me for the same thing *shrugs*
Also, purple eyes are EXTREMELY rare in cats. Cats eyes DO NOT change colour. the color RED does not oocur in their fur either. It's called GINGER.
That picture is also a bird.
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Post by padamay on Jun 30, 2009 13:37:02 GMT -5
Alright I fix it that too, the bird is just a to try to get an idea of what he looks like.
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Post by Charbarboo on Jun 30, 2009 14:56:29 GMT -5
I'll PM Alex about this...
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Post by Alex the Steamed Rice Eater on Jun 30, 2009 16:13:07 GMT -5
Okay, this cat is not accepted.
- Cats do not have red or yellow in their fur like the bird. - Dark navy blue eyes do not exist in nature. - Dead plains cats do not have medicine cats. - Dead Plains cats do not believe in StarClan. - Phoenix named the deputies, and Erie is not one of them. - Also, DP cats are corrupted. - Your spelling and grammar errors are overwhelming, to the point where I can barely understand you. - You already have a medicine cat position. You can't have another one. - You need more in personality, history, and roleplay sample.
This should be completely rewritten.
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